Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-8442302-20150102035230/@comment-4199666-20150102040214

Hi. First of all, welcome to Lumblr. A few things could use fixing up in this. For example, the personality section doesn't tell me much about how she acts. Is she very sweet and accepting of everyone or does she look down on people who prefer to get drunk and laid at parties? Is she very controlling or very submissive when she helps people? Does she get emotional easily or is she very reserved? If you could work on this a bit, that would be great.

Also, your history doesn't really talk about anything that happened in between the time that she was adopted and now. Did she pick up any hobbies in the fifteen years? Has she ever tried to find her birth parents? Has she dated anyone or had a crush on someone? Did she ever have a nemesis when she was younger? Just try to think of things that could be added to give more of an idea of your character.