Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-5139395-20150108130200/@comment-3058106-20150108132733

Alright, so you really just need to add a bit more to the personality. So far all of the traits are mainly just positive and good ones, and she needs some negative aspects in her personality to make her seem like a well-rounded and developed character.

Also, could you go ahead and write more on what happened with her cousin Janelle? So far her history is slightly lacking, so adding a bit of that could help. Also, what really caused her parents to say something like that to her? Was she a bratty child all of her life and they'd grown tired of it? Honestly, I can't really see parents saying something like that just because they were drunk. Were her parents always drunk? Were they alcoholics? Also, with this in mind, write more about her childhood (before she was 12). Maybe then we can get some ideas of why her parents would honestly say such an awful thing. Honestly, I can't really see that happening at all unless the parents hated their daughter and were so drunk they could barely talk. Just because someone is drunk doesn't mean they're gonna tell their 12 year old daughter to kill herself. Maybe you should find a different reason as to why she became a darker person.