Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25380060-20140919015805/@comment-4199666-20140919022700

Few pointers, with the personality traits, could you even it out with a few bad ones. I personally find this resource helpful.

Also, your history is very concise and it's a lot of telling without really showing, as in, I know what happened to her, but I don't know how she felt about it. It obviously takes a bit of practice,but you could work on adding more depth to your writing.

The second one's just a pointer though, only the personality needs fixing.