Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-24706738-20140909111411/@comment-4199666-20140909112744

A few issues - first, I'm not sure if it was you I had to mention "Bipolar" to last time, but Bipolar disorder is a serious mental health issue, not an adjective. Consider instead of saying she has a bipolar fashion sense, she has an inconsistent, inconstant, unpredictable, uncertain etc. fashion sense.

Second, how is a sixteen year old supposed to live on her own? Logically, she would need some sort of parental or carer figure, or she'd have to have been eighteen when she was kicked out of home.

Also, you don't really explain why she suddenly started to hate her family when she was five. You could use more clarification there.