Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25091352-20150903001518/@comment-4199666-20150903025906

Paragraphs are important. "Leonardo is pretty friendly, funny and charming and he's really dorky. He's actually one of the smartest kids you'll meet but he acts the total opposite just to be cool. He's just really wants to fit in and he gets picked on for it. He has a lot going on for him because his parents divorced about two years ago. He misses his mom and he wishes that they could be together. He used to have a girlfriend but he ended up dumping her due to his lack of belief in romantic feelings. His parents’ divorce is actually killing his love life and he decided he doesn't want anything to do with it until he's like thirty or forty. He's pretty much used to living the rich life but has learned to not take this for granted because he's been at rock bottom before, and he doesn't want to end up there again.

He is a really calm guy, and is very laid-back for the most part. He doesn't like when things become too complicated or serious for him. He doesn't like to argue much and he doesn't take negative comments personally. He can get stressed when he feels like things are moving too fast for him or when things are just beyond his control. Even though he's not very serious, he also doesn't like chaos. He just wants to avoid it. He doesn't like it when the different parts of his life combine and cause chaos for him. He likes to get along with everyone but he knows that won't ever happen because certain people from different groups can't just hang out with each other."

I edited some of the phrasing and spelling etc. One thing I noticed is that you used 'to' all the time. 'To' is a preposition. You can go 'to' something. You can have something 'to' do.

Too is another word for also. Reread the sentence and see if you can replace to with also. For example I can't go also something. I can't have something also do.

Two is the number 2 and wasn't an issue.