Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25784487-20150113021520/@comment-3058106-20150131052747

So, for the prompts, I feel like you could've really just added more to them. The first one is alright, but it'd still be nice for you to maybe give a little bit more insight on her feelings and excitement about Christmas. Make her ramble about her preparations. What can she smell throughout her house as her family gets ready? Can she smell the aroma of freshly baked cookies all the way from her bedroom? Does she have any favorite memories about the holiday that she wants to recount?

Also, the second prompt is really lacking. It's only a simple two short sentences. Can you write more about the problems she may face in the crowd? Maybe she gets shoved by someone rushing through the halls to get to class. She drops all of her books and papers and tries to get everything. Someone may help her, or maybe everyone just continues on their way. How does all of this make her feel? How frustrated is she? Is she about to blow a gasket from everyone pushing and shoving? Does she feel the relief wash over her as she reaches her locker? Just add more to it.