Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-4816815-20141008161921/@comment-3058106-20141008205557

Okay, first of all, you need to add more to her personality. I really don't know much about what she is like. Maybe write more about why is so confident and fearless. List a few more positive and negative traits that she shows a lot of and include extra little tidbits about them.

Also, you didn't include how your character would describe themselves in one word, so try to add that in.

Finally, her history is also just a single sentence. I know nothing about her past. Tell us about her life in Britain and her childhood. What was that like? Tell us more about why she thought moving to Blackwood would help her art career. Write more about why she started doing art - maybe even why she likes it so much. Talk about her life in Blackwood and what is happening to her currently. I really know nothing about the character and there is so much more you could add about her.