Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25380060-20150220082903/@comment-24930755-20150220120956

I think the personality is lacking a but so I think that's going to need a little bit more work.

Same goes with the history. It has very few grammatical errors but it would the fine one you fix that. Why was she expelled? Did she do anything to against the school's rules? I know it isn't really a major part of her life, but the part where she moved to Blackwood Mountain was a bit vague. Did she make any friends? How was school for her while she was there? When she moved to Lebeaux, how did some people remember her? Did they see her somewhere and instantly remembered her or something? Why did they spread rumors?

Anyway, fix that and I'll be able to approve her.

i don't want to