Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-27742904-20160626033900/@comment-3058106-20160628212409

So everything looks good but you just have some grammatical mistakes throughout each section.


 * " She is can be creative  " need to be edited to something like "She is creative" or "She can be creative."

*" Most of the time she can be busy because she is focusing on her studies, she also has OCD which means she is really organized." This is a run-on sentence. Separate each sentence. It should be "Most of the time.... focusing on her studies. She also has..."

* One day, her dad got remarried, and Amanda loved her stepmother, her stepmother was like her mom except Amanda loves her real mom a little bit more." Same thing here. After "... Amanda loved her stepmother" you start a new sentence. It should be "...Amanda loved her stepmother. Her stepmother..."

There's a a few other times you do this, especially in the last 3 paragraphs of her history. If you need me to help you edit them, let me know.