Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-24492951-20150821202010/@comment-5073094-20150821202637

I feel that her personality is a bit lacking. You should explain her personality in depth more. This is a link to a few character traits that you can use.

In addition to that, your history skips a lot. You never really explained her life. All i get from reading it is that she's a triplet, homeschooled, and dances. That's it. Give your character some depth. List significant events in her life. Expand on what you've written. You should also maybe look through everything and check for grammar errors.