Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25091352-20150128031712/@comment-3058106-20150128033126

I feel like you could expand a bit more with her personality. Also, maybe add a bit more about her childhood and why her mother thought of her as a problem child. Expand on that a bit more. Also, add a bit more about her career as a pin-up model. Write about how sh efeels about it and if she actually enjoys the job. She took it up as a way to get money, so does she actually like it? Try to add a bit more about that.