Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-25693292-20141216064629/@comment-3058106-20141217133011

Alright, well, I still feel like the history still needs to have more in it. First of all, everything is out of order. You start from her past and skip to 2010, but then make a run all the way back to 2004 and 2008, then skip back to 2010. You need to right this in order and not completely all over the place. It can get confusing to read.

Also, I still feel like her history is lacking. There's not much that tells me about her past. Sure, you mention how she traveled around the world, but still that tells me nothing. Why did her family decide to travel? Was it because of one her parents' jobs? How could they afford to do that? Are they a wealthy family? How did they gain so much wealth? What were her parents' jobs? Where did they travel? Was there a specific place she absolutely loved and wanted to stay forever? Why did she love that place so much? What was her least favorite place?

Why did she skip her first grade year? She could have been homeschooled during her travels by her parents, right? If she skipped a year, she would have to go back and redo it unless she'd been homeschooled or smart enough to skip an entire grade when she returned. Does this mean that she's intelligent? How did Jae become confident and outgoing? Was it because of her travels? Did seeing all these different cultures and people all the time help her become more outgoing in school? Does she even remember parts of the travels? She was very young during the time so there's the possiblity she's actually forgotten most of it, so has she? Does she want to travel again so this time she can remember it all?

How did Jae become popular? Sure, it was because of her personality, but what other factors were there? Was it that she started hanging out with the right crowd? Was it that she has a superiority complex and expected herself to always be on top of the world? Does she consider herself to be a leader? Does she expect others to want to be her friend? Does her selfishness play a major role in how she acts around others? Is this why she would expect others to worship the ground upon which she walks?

Now, besides all that, I feel like you need to add a few other hobbies and stuff to it. Here's this image. All you need to do is click and drag it to come up with ideas for her. However, just don't go with random ones. Based on her personality and history, pick ones that actually make sense. I doubt she would have self-image issues based on other traits.