Board Thread:Creation Box/@comment-24492951-20150807193809/@comment-4199666-20150808003534

Hey yo.

So the history has a few typos and stuff so I'd recommend having a proofread of that because it's easy enough to do.

As far as the personality section, you've literally only listed positive things about her. The only message I got from it was that she is nice. "She doesn't have a mean bone in her body" "She's kind and understanding" "She's a goody two shoes" etc. You've just repeated the point that she's nice.

What else is she? How does she react under pressure? Does she get stressed out a lot? Does she feel like people are nice back to her or do they treat her like a doormat? Does she ever think about being rebellious and change her mind or does the thought just never occur to her? When she does get in trouble, how does she react? What is she really not good at and how does she react when she has to do it? Is she introverted or extroverted?

It'll come with practice but you sort of need to be thinking about all these things, plus plenty more when you make a character. They shouldn't just be 'nice' if there's more to them.